Henley Ceraph

Kera Blacc · Oct 5th, 2016, 12:13:08 AM

Hensley Ceraph
Unknown:: Energy Vampire - Reboot - Unaffiliated :: Loner
Currently in:

Character Background

*Born on an unknown planet and grew upon Tython
*Studied under a Nikto Jedi Master as aSpecialist
*helped to calm negotiations &survived an ambush on her first solo mission.
*Was genetically altered through anexperiment after being captured shortly after ranking up in theformer order.

The Information-

Raw Material!
*Sado-Masochism: Hensley draws rawpower through pain. As she becomes emotional, or injured she can useher own inner or outer conflict to extend her own force aura byturning that pain into a raw resource of hidden power. This is atemorary boost and can be a bit taxing depending on the circumstancessurrounding the sudden surge.
*Pyro-Sado-Masochism: a major sourceof power in the application of her pyrokinetics. She has not becomeimmune to her own element and prefers to acknowldge the infliction ofthe surge in pain when it comes to accessing and utilizingPyrokinetics. This has the greatest potential to tax isis after thesurge has cooled.
*Specialist: Hensley has always beenand will continue to be a specialist character. I never enjoyedwriting her as a favoritist when it comes to her abilities. I feelthat sometimes its best to not be so picky since If one was to mastera combination of techniques it could be more beneficial to the OC andeveryone they come into contact of conflict with.
*SpeciesSecrets: Hensley didn't start her life as a Vampiric Entity, it hadbeen thrust upon her during her being held in bondage centuries ago.Her true species is unknown however its one that believes heavily ina spiritual caste in which ancient gods are were highly revered asbieng the Monarchy of their people.
Its similar to that of theancient sith species, with some minor or major differences.

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Existing Relationships

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Current Plots

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Credit for the basic template goes to Dun of RPG-D

Hensley Ceraph · Oct 5th, 2016, 12:14:41 AM

Whoops!

***Lilaena De'Ville*** · Oct 6th, 2016, 10:16:30 AM

Is this the character you'll be using the knight rank for?

***Loklorien s'Ilancy*** · Oct 10th, 2016, 11:51:33 AM

Thanks for posting your plotter!

It's pretty obvious you've put a lot of work into this character, and we look forward to seeing how Hensley adapts to a very different era in history. There are a few issues with your backstory that have come up in our moderators' discussion, and they basically boil down to your backstory implying a lot more power than we typically allow for a knight-level character:

We've never allowed a single character to wield planetkillers and other superweapons. Even if it's in the distant past, that's a history-changing event.
Assuming your character was active during one of the old Sith Wars, there never would have been an alliance between the Jedi and the Sith unless your character was attacking them from a Palpatine-like level of power, which, again, is far too much for a knight. It's rare for even a Master to wield that sort of influence.

Your basic ideas are sound, but it would help if you could scale them down to something more believable for a fallen Jedi Knight rather than a galactic despot like Palpatine. If you have any questions, I'll be happy to help if I can!

Kera Blacc · Oct 12th, 2016, 07:22:23 PM

Excuse the foul up. Accidentally posted this on the wrong account and then got busy irl.

***Loklorien s'Ilancy*** · Oct 13th, 2016, 12:38:21 AM

No worries. Posting a plotter with an alt account is perfectly fine.

If you could address the points in my last post though, that would be appreciated.

Kera Blacc · Oct 13th, 2016, 12:48:12 AM

Ugh.. Will fix this in a few hours.

Edited at 6 am.

**Halajiin Rabeak** · Oct 13th, 2016, 12:07:30 PM

Heya, reading through your plotter and I've got a few questions on some things could use some clarification, because I may not be not be understanding things correctly, here.

What time period is your character originally from? As in, how long ago in years was it that she and her padawan went to investivate those mysterious lab? We've got a few characters around here from specific points in time, and as they've already established history at those points there may be conflict if yours doesn't jive with what's been established by writers here already.

She's an heiress, but after being gone so long she would likely be presumed dead, and whatever monies/land/holdings she had would logically have been redisbursed years ago. If they were, how does she intend to get around being penniless upon her escape from where she's being held?

Is energy vampire your race, or a Force skill? I'm not clear on this. Also, just so we know, how does the vampirism of energy work in terms of how long does it sustain your character, and what is its effect on the victim?

Is your character also known as "the Dark One," or is that another character?

I presume the rituals that are keeping her imprisoned are also sustaining her with energy? Or is she in some sort of cryo pod or other form of fully suspended animation? Why this matters is, is she able to think during this whole time, or has essentially been switched off?

You mention you want to "extinguish the current seat of the Dark Empire." Do you mean the Empire as in everything the Imperials control, and therefore mean you want to kill the Empress? Or are you speaking about the Sith? As right now the Sith are kinda doing their own thing and don't have a "seat" being actively played. For the most part, any known Force users in Empire-controlled lands get rounded up and either put in the Knights program, or imprisoned/otherwise dealt with. Force users in Alliance space are kinda free to do as they like, but the Jedi can also freely operate in Alliance space, so the Sith can't really act with impunity there, either.

And, this "Force Crush" power seems... very overpowered. Telekenesis is a tricky thing, and the ability to crush a space station with your mind is something even the best masters here can't do, and I'm not sure anyone was ever able to do. There might be ways that TK could destroy a space station, but they're rather involved and intricate, and would still take a lot out of the one doing it. Blunt-force TK is fine, but I think this power needs to be really scaled back, here.

From a plot perspective, after being gone for so long, no one is going to know who she is, and her name likely will have been entirely forgotten, not to mention whoever put her in her prison has likely been dead for some time now. That may be something you want to consider factoring into her future ambitions. My character was also out of circulation for over a century, lost everything, and no one knew who he was, and he's had to rebuild from square one, as a heads-up. As a general tip, too, we're much more about story than power levels, on this board. I know some boards put a focus on big powers, so that might be a bit of an adjustment for you.

Hensley Ceraph · Oct 13th, 2016, 07:20:10 PM

Currently having a writers block with this, but will try to answer your questions

1. Energy Vampire is a race in sw lore
2. E.V. feeds of the life force of its victim. Just a fancy name for a Vampire in the lore we got in our real world, without the weakness to garlic and religious items.
3. Period? Oh a couple thousand seeing as the E.V. are don't exactly die unless killed by an enemy.
4. Rich? Not likely.. Gave up her wealth upon joining the Jedi Order of old.
5. Getting around.. Now ya see that's the tricky part, thought I'd borrow yours. xD
6. "Dark ONe" is my fave little pet name for the character
7. The crypt she is in has her contained with an energy field that was designed to keep her confined. A timeless stasis-like energy shield/field/whatever.
8. It can be "switched off" but only by a knowledgeable force user that understands the type of stuff.
9. Yup! Hensley wants to kill them and take their toys. xD
10. Technically she's been confined for way too long. Force Crush will have greatly weakened by then due to sheer boredom.
11. The Force Crush is a past power that was worked on for what seems forever on another community, it took time to mature.. Wont be that powerful again, but can crush a cave, small building.. or Slimer.

Hope that helps.

**Halajiin Rabeak** · Oct 13th, 2016, 07:41:57 PM

Okay, couple issues I feel I should bring up relating to some of your answers, here, and I'll use your list number for them for clarity.

2: Does it kill the victim? And if it doesn't, what effect does it have on the victim? How long would each victim sustain your character for?

3: What actual era was it when your character and her padawan went into the lab? Like, literally how many years ago? Also, how many years ago was your character actually born?

5: Borrow my what? Ship? Hat? Lunch? Not bloody likely to any of those three.

8: What I meant was, while in that stasis is she thinking in real-time, or is she basically unconscious, and when it wears off it'll be like a blink of an eye since she was put in there? This has very important ramifications in levels of madness.

9: Not bloody likely. They will kill you dead. Hard. And they have the manpower and tech to do it, so don't think you can just sweep in against the Empire, you will get fucked up hard. 100% truth.

10 & 11: Force powers don't typically suffer from time. It's all about mastery. Still, your level of Force Crush will likely never, ever be approved here, because it's Mary Sue levels of OP. In general it needs to be toned down, and have a DRASTIC effect on the user from it. Wielding that level of power through the Force would burn up a ton of energy, and likely leave you very weakened for a period of time.

I currently play the character who is likely the most powerful with TK on this whole board, but even he can't just do stuff like that at the drop of a hat. Nor should he ever be able to. This isn't a power game, it's a character game, here.

Hensley Ceraph · Oct 13th, 2016, 07:52:28 PM

2. She does. The effects range between death-to-zombie minion type ordeal.
2. They can sustain her until death.. Not long.

3. Old Republic. Around the SWTOR Era, maybe a little farther than that. I might be getting the date wrong here.

5. Yup! hand over the keys. :P (sarcasm)

8. The character can either be awake, pacified or in meditation. (I'm going with the 3rd)

9. lmao! I never stated she'd walk into palace city and make a bold statement to get her executed; she's mission oriented, not suicidal. It'll take time and planning like everything else.

10.11 Now this community is indeed different. The other, the first I joined, informed me they could weaken if not used for x amount of time. Thanks for clearing that up. And trust me, I don't play at "god mode".. I know how to make it "fit". But as you have stated, it will be toned down.

***Loklorien s'Ilancy*** · Oct 14th, 2016, 11:28:38 AM

There's a massive amount of basic backstory and strengths and powers, but I'm not really seeing a balance in terms of weaknesses or stumbling blocks. Energy Vampires have no weakness to garlic or religious relics etc, but there needs to be something (or things) that they are susceptible to.

I'll use myself as an example - My character is a Lupine, and while she may be able to shapeshift into a vornskr, has heightened senses, and a long lifespan, she is burned by silver and cortosis, and owing to her lineage is at risk of dementia. The other lineage of Lupines are unable to withstand the Force, and go mad when it is used (much in the same way a full moon affects werewolves), becoming feral monsters trying to tear apart whatever used the Force. And on top of that, she has her own internal issues and problems that prevent her from doing things (or at the very least making them incredibly uncomfortable to do).

Balance is key, and character flaws are like gold.

Hensley Ceraph · Oct 14th, 2016, 12:22:18 PM

How about natural light? Like sunlight? real lore could be used for the weakness; cause her to turn to ash if prolonged exposure to sunlight. There could also be a mystical amulet or something imbued or blessed by an ancient "priest" type character (Think Kissai) that could very well kill her too.

Maybe a rare poison? .

**Anauri Rabeak** · Oct 14th, 2016, 01:05:16 PM

If it's sunlight, you'd have to be in total blackout mode while in space. Ultraviolet radiation would be everywhere in space, so essentially your only safe place would be behind solid walls, meaning you couldn't even look out a windshield or real window.

A race simply cannot be that hard to kill, because if they were, they'd have become so overpopulated that they'd be the only sentient species in the galaxy by now. There needs to be a more realistic, and more common weakness, as sunlight would be a 100% killer of such a race in space. Not to mention anyone with an ultraviolet flashlight would be able to to take you down just by shining it at you, so sorry, the sunlight thing would be a no-go for me.

The mystical amulet thing also doesn't fly, because if something can be made to be harmful against you, anything would be able to be made the same way, and it also falls into the realm of magic outside the Force, which is a can of worms I think we've decided should remain permanently shut around here.

How about you can simply be killed/injured any way a normal person could be? You can extend your actual lifespan by your race's ability to suck life force out of others, but that's about the extent of your natural abilities. It'd be like the elves in Lord of the Rings, as they're immortal only in the sense that they don't age. They can be killed like anyone else, however, by standard physical means.

Hensley Ceraph · Oct 14th, 2016, 01:23:13 PM

Not really hard to kill. Her race makes her essentially ageless but not immune to death. I am sure if someone decided to impale her with a Lightsaber or shoot her with a pistol that'd be enough to kill her.
She is no god, therefor she can die.